The ground on all of the eight pieces has been made less obvious and slightly pixelated so doesnt take from the photos. The main part of the grounds is also in the bottom right which is where they are stood so they all look as though they are stood on a base.
Type droops with the way it is arranged. I have also used a full stop after the first line to add emphasis.
Gap between two lines smaller so they link together better. The expression on her face means she is in pain but she has her thumbs up as a confusion which shows a split personality. The lines on the ground is more crazy which matches the quote.
Type in corner works well as a step. Ground looks as though it has visual noise in it which matches the quote.
White in top corner looks as though that's where the light is coming from and it also matches where the light in the photo is too. The type has also been arranged to look as though it is a silhouette stood in the corner ready to fight.
Removed capital 'E' on 'each' and aligned to the 't' on 'twelve'. The light coming from above works well because it is looking down.
Moved the 'cos' into the column below because it isn't needed in the first line.
'Onto' means she is on her own little world. I have made 'they know me there' bigger so it links together better and remove the 'T' on 'They'
Type works better in different sizes because second line acts as a comic punch line so it is better smaller because the focus is on the first line and split personality.
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